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PostSubject: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Wed Aug 10, 2011 8:02 am

Well, I read through the book again and found that there were still a few things that I had to intergrate somehow:

In David's plot:
-Viera must contact her vilage via the Kawsun network shortly after being lost in the jungle with David.
-It must be shown that the Hunters tracking David make use of Diceratops.

In Priantos' plot:
-Priantos must find more substancial evidence of Iga activity near Jin.
-There must be some evidence of a mole in the Order.
-Tiard's attraction to Priantos must become more apparent, more gradually. (I apologize for the gayness. It is required for a huge piece of subplot in the other novels to work. Either that or he has to be female, which would actually just make things even more problematic. Hope there are no homophobes here... If there are, at least they're not human, right? Right?)
-It must be revealed how Nash'ir ruined Priantos' life (if you guys think that's neccisary in the first book).


So, I would like to know where I could change the novel to intergrate those things.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Tue Aug 23, 2011 8:10 pm

Hmmm... I just realized I didn't read the last chapters. Dangit. Be right back. Although you're not online so I don't think that matters.

Ok, I read all the stuff and now it is 12:00... Derp. I'll read the entire book again and look for places to add these things, okay?
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Wed Aug 24, 2011 4:36 am

Yay!. Pleasantly Surprised

What did you think of the ending?
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Wed Aug 24, 2011 5:29 am

It was pretty awesome. Kinda cheesy, in a way. Entire "you are the chosen one" kinda thing. Could use some refinement. But still a good way to end the book.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Wed Aug 24, 2011 10:34 am

Yeah, okay. I'll refine.


What did you think of Tiard's betrayal?
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Wed Aug 24, 2011 4:02 pm

Unexpected. Very good plot twist. I definitely did not see it coming.
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PostSubject: Re: The Final Touches (not including pics and apendixes)   Thu Aug 25, 2011 4:31 am

Anything else?
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