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PostSubject: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Sun Jul 31, 2011 9:36 am

Here's the chapter so far:

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Chapter 26
Race to Darwin

“Viera,” I said under my heavy breathing, clutching my arm.
She turned back, looking at me sympathetically. “David. We can’t rest again.” She came closer. She tried to stroke my arm, but pulled away when I gasped in pain at her touch.
“It-it’s unbear-unbearable,” I said, shivering, though my body was burning up. The pain in my arm was impossibly bad. It felt like razor blades were digging into the flesh of my left arm as far as the bone. At first I’d assumed the acidic rain of Novusvita was burning my skin, but what I was feeling now couldn’t possibly have resulted from that. Acid burning just doesn’t work like that. No, what I felt was a thousand times worse.
We had resorted to resting during the day and travelling at night, when it was less likely to rain. “Drain it again,” Viera said.
I tried to lift my arm, but I couldn’t. The pain was just too great and somehow it felt like my joints had fused anyway. I couldn’t lift my arm. Not like there would be any rain in there. “I c-can’t.”
“David, we’ll have to cut the sleeve off.”
“That-that would only ex-expose it m-more,” I protested, stuttering in pain. I’m not sure, but I almost think I cried as well.
“We have to see what’s causing you such pain!” she insisted. “And without a sleeve, the rain won’t be able to build up in it,” she added.
I was quite for a while, my only sound being my feverish breathing. “F-fine.”
“Lie down,” she instructed, taking out the bone knife she had stolen from the Hunter.
I did as I was told and I soon felt her stick the blade into the gash at my shoulder and begin to cut away at my sleeve. I could feel her struggling.
“This is a very tough material,” she said, cutting through the strong Xephlon fibres.
“J-just hurry, plea-please,” I said. Eventually she had separated the sleeve from the rest of the suit, but as soon as she began pulling it off of me, I let out a scream of agony. It felt like the material had fused with my skin. Pulling on the sleeve, it felt like she was pulling the skin of my arm away with it.
“I’m sorry!” she said in a hushed whisper. “But please try to keep quite or they might hear us.”
I bit my lip and allowed her to pull. Soon I felt something tear out of my arm and swore in agony.
“I’m sorry!” she kept apologising. It almost felt as though she was feeling the same pain I was. I could instinctively read it from her expression by now.
Finally Viera seemed to give up, but then had an idea and cut the sleeve open in the length. When she opened it, I could hear the sound one associates with road kill being pealed off a road or rotten flesh being pulled off a body. I could see a look of horror on Viera’s face. It looked eerie in the pale light of the foliage. “David…” she began. I wanted desperately to see my arm for myself, but couldn’t bring myself to look. It was either the pain or fear. Possibly both.
“W-what is it? Is-is it bad-d?” Of course it was bad. There was no question by Viera’s expression.
“I’m going to lift your arm out of the sleeve, okay?” she said.
I nodded. Pain shot through my psyche as soon as she lay her fingers on my flesh. When she began pulling my arm free from the Xephlon sleeve of the hexsuit, I could once more hear that nauseating sound, as did it feel like my arm was being torn apart – flesh from bone – as she moved it upwards. She gave one final tug and I was engulfed in flames of agony, screaming. But it was over. The ordeal was over. But that small pleasure was short-lived as I saw the state of my arm.
“OH GOD!!” Where raw flesh wasn’t visible, my arm was covered with a sickening yellow-green mould with roots that I could see digging into my flesh and beneath what was left of my skin. Where my hand had once been, the visible finger bones were tangled in the organism. I finally saw why it had felt like my arm was being torn – the thing’s roots had dug into the fibres of my suite as well. That, and much of my skin had come off, the rotten mess still sticking to the interior of my sleeve. I was horrified, beyond all else. Even the pain disappeared.
But in a way, I would later figure, I was lucky. Had I not had nanomeds in my body, the infection would have killed me long ago and I wouldn’t be here to tell my story.
But at that time all I could do was hurl myself onto my side, tear off my mask with my remaining hand and spill the watery content of my stomach out onto the forest floor.


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So, basically, green clouds (those "clouds" of floating algae) + rain clouds = those algae thingies ending us in the rain. Normally, they would then land on something edible and grow into those yellow-green masses before releasing their spores back into the atmosphere. In this case, seeping into David's sleeve, the edible something was his flesh.

So, what should they do with his arm? Lop it off? Try to remove the mass? Leave it?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Sun Jul 31, 2011 11:03 am

I'd lop it off, probably. Definitely not leave it, unless they have something to dull the pain until they get back to other humans who can properly remove the mass.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Sun Jul 31, 2011 1:18 pm

Extreme pain or Ghost hand... Ghost hand, hands down.

Chop that sucker off, do it quick like a band aid. Though unless he is going to go under a district nine transformation... Which would be awesome.

But ultimately, your choice.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Mon Aug 01, 2011 5:01 am

Let's assume we chop it off, how would they stop the bleeding?

(That reminds me. I forgot to fill the sleeve with a puss-blood-mess.)

Infection won't be a problem because of the nanomeds.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Mon Aug 01, 2011 9:35 am

A turnicut... Or however you spell it. Then the wound would close its self after it is removed of Infection.
Tie something tight an inch from the place the arm is severed.

The problem would be Gangre, but it would be removed by the Nanomeds. And GhostArm, which would not be removed by the Nanomeds, as it is a Psychological problem that happens after a Limb is removed, where the Nerves that are severed act all weird.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Mon Aug 01, 2011 10:56 am

Tourniquet. It's French. I think.


Ghostarm... 8D

Guess we'll lop it off, then.


Then, I suppose he'll later get a replacement limb, right? Do you think it's more likely to be a robotic limb or a cloned, flesh limb? Or some sort of easily manufactured hybrid?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Mon Aug 01, 2011 11:16 am

Ghost Arm!!!

I would rather not make Mr. David, Mr. Skywalker. As that may validate relations between Starwars and Avatar. So, No robot Arm, if we can help it.

We need to Figure out how to graft a cloned arm onto a stub.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Mon Aug 01, 2011 3:54 pm

Lots of glue and duct tape.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Mon Aug 01, 2011 4:09 pm

... Don't forget Windex?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Tue Aug 02, 2011 4:27 am

I don't see that as a good enough reason he can't have a robotic arm. For one, the circumstances of loosing the original arm are vastly different, plus I'd like the arm to look more like Nina Sharp from Fringe's robo-arm.


In any case, should they lop it off at the shoulder or at the elbow?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Tue Aug 02, 2011 6:33 am

Chop it all off.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Tue Aug 02, 2011 7:03 am

Well, where is the Algae Infection at... Elbow and below or Shoulder and below.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Tue Aug 02, 2011 7:16 am

From the sound of things it had covered almost his entire arm.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Tue Aug 02, 2011 11:12 am

Okay, the whole thing, then.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Tue Aug 02, 2011 1:48 pm

Just as long as some one stabs where it would be and he screams out in Ghost Arm Pain.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Wed Aug 03, 2011 8:14 am

That's retarded. Rather have it give him awesome ghost powers with which to fight the Hunters. That's much more logical! *Rolls Eyes*


Okay, now let's talk about actually replacing his arm. Cloned replacement, robotic replacement or a hybrid?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 9:18 am

*Important and overlooked obviousness!!*


How are they going to chop his arm off to begin with!? D=
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 11:56 am

A knife?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 2:01 pm

The way they do it in Starwars... Lightsabers! Lolz JK

Surely someone has a large sharp object to cut through plants and other things.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 4:15 pm

Okay, Viera's just gonna gnaw at the bone with her knife until she's through. I've actually already done the scene now and, infact, I'm about to post the chapter. Smile


However, NOW, after you've read the chapter, it needs a new name. So, what shall this chapter be called?


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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:39 pm

Something awesome. About arms. And amputation. And pain.

Awesome arm amputation of pain?
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 5:50 pm

It also has to involve Priantos' part, somehow.
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 8:55 pm

I have a name, Infections: Of the Mind and Body. Or something to do with Algae, and Traitors...
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Fri Aug 05, 2011 11:51 pm

Hmmmmmmm...
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PostSubject: Re: Chapter 26: What shall be the fate of David's arm???   Sat Aug 06, 2011 10:26 pm

Hmmmmm indeed.
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